2023年2月黑吉皖滇四省联考读后续写讲评学案.docx

202302xx×滇四省联考Anorphanedbabyxxxxxx××学案文本：MyhusbandandIenjoyseeinglifethroughtheeyesofourchildren.It,samazingtowatchastheydiscovertheirworld.Whilewewereoutdoorslastsummerenjoyingthesunshine,ouroldestdaughter,Kaytlin,calledmetothedoorway.Beneaththestepswasababyredsquirrel.Wewatcheditfromadistance,notwantingtodisturbitorscareoffitsmother.Butafteralongwait-andlookingallaroundourhouseforsignsofanestoramother-werealizedthetinysquirrelwaslost.Shakingterribly,hewasweak,thin,andhungry.Wetriedtofindanexperttohelp,buttheInlandFisheriesandWildlifewebsiteshowedthattherewerenowildlifeexpertsinourarea.Aftersomequickresearch,weconcludedthatxxxbestwaytogivexxxsquirrelafightingchancewastocareforhimourselves.Soatriptoxxxlocalstoreformilkandsupplieswasinorder.Moreresearchtaughtushowmuchtofeedhim,howtoestimatehisage,howandwhentowean（断奶）him,andthatweshouldlethimgoassoonashecouldsurviveonhisown.OurdaughtersandItookturnsinfeeding44Squirt.,Kaytlintookonthemostresponsibility.Shetaughthimtoeatfromabottle,andshewokeinthenightforhisfeeds.Toourrelief.Squirtsoonbecamehealthyandstrong.Withinafewweekshebecamemoreactive.Hewouldchatter（吱吱叫）forhisnextmeal,playfullygoaroundthegirls,andliedownonthemforsleep.Itwasn,tlongbeforehewasweanedontosolidfoodandreintroducedtothewild.Hisfirstfewvisitstothegreatoutdoorswerefunny.Justlikeachild,hewouldplayinthegrasssomeandthenrunbacktoKaytlinforsafety.Soonshehadhimclimbingtreesandfindingnestmaterial.Onedayinthetrees,Squirtmetupwithafamilyofgraysquirrels.Onenight,Squirtdidn,tcomebacktoourhouseanditrainedhard.语言积累：1 .在台阶下2 .把吓跑3 .一段漫长而沉默的等待4 .鸟窝或者妈妈的迹象5 .微笑但是值得一搏的机会6 .轮流做某事7 .承担责任8 .嬉闹地在孩子身边转9 .重新接触野外世界文本缩写：1.astsummerwhilewewereethesunshine,ourdaughterKaytlinfoundababyredsquirrelbeneaththesteps,whichwasobviouslylost,weak,thinandh.Aftrmanyveffortsandsomequickresearch,westartedtocareforthebabysquirrelby（we）,whichwenamedSquirt.Fortunately,Squirtgrewhealthy,strongandactive.Morethanthat,hestartedto（reintroduce）totheoutsideworldanddevelopsome（survive）skills,whichmeantthatitwouldnotbelongweshouldlethimgotothewild,hebelonged.Onedaythetrees,Squirtmetupwithafamilyofgraysquirrels.写作思路：!.Onedayinthetrees,Squirtmetupwithafamilyofgraysquirrels.思路1：因为同类，被接纳，马上打成一片，和谐相处；我们不舍+高兴一每天晚上还是回来，不过越来越迟（连接下段首句）思路2：因为毛色不同，谨慎试探，被接纳，和谐相处；我们高兴-每天晚上还是回来，不过越来越迟，和我们疏远，我们有点失落（连接下段首句）2.Onenight,Squirtdidn,tcomebacktoourhouseanditrainedhard.思路1:担心被雨淋湿想不到躲藏处；当晚/第二天寻找，与新朋友相处挺好的，放心告别；永远离开/偶尔回来思路2:担心被雨淋湿想不到躲藏处；当晚/第二天寻找，/被雨淋湿+饥寒，抱回家；一如往常每天回来；思路3：在担心中度过一晚；第二天院子里见到松鼠和他的伙伴，与我们告别；感悟（给以关心，也要给以自由；或者呼应首段）情节构建（Q-A）：Tryrtoanswerthefollowingquestions:!.Onedayinthetrees,Squirtmetupwithafamilyofgraysquirrels.QkHowdidSquirtgetalongwiththegraySqUirrels?（动作+心理活动）Q2:HowdidwereacttoSquirt,snewcondition?（不舍+高兴，心理活动）Q3:Didhecomebacktoourhouseeverynight?（下段首句）2.0nenight,Squirtdidn,tcomebacktoourhouseanditrainedhard.QkHowdidwefeelaboutSquirt,sabsenceinsuchterribleweather?（情感+心理活动）Q2:Whatdidwedowiththesituation?（动作）Q3:Howwouldthestoryend?Whatwasmyreflection?（结尾+感悟）（回应文本首段seeinglifethroughtheeyesofourchildren.It,samazingtowatchastheydiscovertheirworld.解读一个有爱和关心的世界）参考范文IOnedayinthetrees,Squirtmetupwithafamilyofgraysquirrels.Unfortunately,theywerenotpleasedwithhispresenceandscoldedhim,swattinghimaway.Squirtquicklylearnedtobemoresociallyawareand,forthenextfewdays,hespenthistimeplayinginthetreesaroundourhouse.Atnight,hewouldcomedowntorest.Squirt'svisitstothetreesbecamearegularoccurrence,andhesoonbecamefamiliarwiththefamilyofsquirrels.Helearnedtorespecttheirboundariesand,inreturn,theyacceptedhimaspartoftheircommunity.Squirtwasnowapartofthefamily,andheenjoyedhistimeinthetreeswiththem.Onenight,Squirtdidn'tcomebacktoourhouseanditrainedhard.Ourgirlsfretted.Butwhenthesunrose,therewasSquirt,beggingforabitetoeat.Andthatremainedthepatternforafewweeks.Squirtbecamewellknowninourneighborhood,andvisitorsknewtobeonthelookoutwhentheystoppedby.Butmostlyheplayedinthetrees,chatteringawaytoanyonewhohappenedtocrosshispathandoccasionallyswipingsnacksfromourtoddlerboys.Theexperiencewasentertainingandheartwarmingforourfamily.Inthewildandsomewhatsillymomentsofraisinganorphanedbabysquirrel,ourchildrenlearnedtovalueandappreciatelife.参考范文2Onedayinthetrees,Squirtmetupwithafamilyofgraysquirrels.AtfirstSquirtwashesitant,buthesoonrealizedthattheywerefriendlyandhestartedtoplaywiththem.Thegirlsand1watchedinamazementashechasedthemupanddownthetreetrunksandbranches.KaytlinwasthrilledtoseeSquirtmakingfriendsandbecomingmoreconfident.Weknewthatthiswasagreatsignandthathewasreadytobeonhisown.Onenight,Squirtdidn'tcomebacktoourhouseanditrainedhard.Wewereworriedabouthimandthoughtthathemighthavegottenlostagain,butthenextmorningheappearedatthedoorsoakingwetandshivering.Kaytlintookhiminanddriedhimoff,andweallbreathedasighofrelief.Overthenextfewdays,Squirtstartedcomingbacktovisituslessandless,untilfinallyhestoppedcomingaltogether.Althoughwemissedhim.weknewthatthiswasagoodthingandthathewasfinallyabletolivehis